An excerpt from my script review for Star Wars First Draft which will be available 05/04/26:
2.) Plot Stability
When he was trying to launch this new universe, I knew George Lucas had trouble,...
Hi all.
No review today. Instead I wanted to take a bit of time and discuss something that’s been kicking around upstairs for yours truly, and mentioned more frequently in some of the...
An excerpt from my script review for The Invisible Man (2020) which will be available 04/20/26:
1.) Marketability of the Idea
To be clear, I’ve never read the novel by H.G. Wells.
I’ve also never...
An excerpt from my script review for Send Help which will be available 04/14/26:
1.) Marketability of the Idea
Give me the same, only different. – Sam Raimi
Misery meets Castaway was in all the comments on the...
An excerpt from my script review for Roofman which will be available 04/06/26:
5.) Format
This Saturday I had absolutely nothing going on.
Brought the boy home from college Friday afternoon, and he spent all...
An excerpt from my script review for Captain Blood (1994) which will be available 04/01/26:
2.) Plot Stability
My biggest complaint, aside from the similarities in the previous section?
Way too many sea battles.
Listen, I...
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An excerpt from Reals' script review for Harrow Alley which will be available 03/16/18:
What Needs Work
-- Wow. HUGE chunks of text. I realize this was written at a different time, but steer...
An excerpt from my script review for Money Monster which will be available 05/16/16:
4.) Dialogue and Description
The description.
One thing we should avoid is jumping back and forth between “side scenes”. By...
Hello one and all.
Interesting week this week. Roy's taking the family on a bit of a short vacation. If he seems like he's ignoring you, he's not, but if you...
An excerpt from my script review for The Disaster Artist which will be available 12/11/17:
3.) Quality of Characters
Greg is both Lisa and Mark.
Think about that for a second…
Amber could be Mark, but...
An excerpt from my script review for The Martian which will be available 10/06/15:
4.) Dialogue and Description
Similar to earlier argument, the sassy, sarcastic dialogue never really made me think Mark was in...
An excerpt from my script review for Sherlock Holmes and the Vengeance of Dracula which will be available 12/03/18:
4.) Dialogue and Description
We’ll focus on the description first.
The Good
The writer did an excellent...
An excerpt from my script review for Antebellum which will be available 10/05/20:
4.) Dialogue and Description
We’ve said it before on here that screenwriting “rules” are more like “guidelines”.
https://youtu.be/jl0hMfqNQ-g
Sometimes you can break these...
An excerpt from my script review for Wonder which will be available 02/19/18:
5.) Format
Watch the name dropping.
I just discussed with my children, two of whom saw the movie on a field trip,...
