An excerpt from Reals’ script review for Tamara (2003) by Jeffrey Reddick which will be available 07/18/18:
What Worked
Pg. 5 – 6 – It’s nice that her editorial has direct consequences on the plot and the other characters and isn’t just there for a throw-away moment.
Pg. 19 – I like that Tamera brings this on herself – by messing with dark magic and wanting what she cannot have. Typically it is just an unfortunate person who is bullied and/or killed, but here we have a moral grey-area and Tamera is at least partially responsible for her actions and the consequences.
Pg. 33 – This is really just a different twist on the “I Know What You Did Last Summer” plot – a group of friends kill someone and try to hide the body, but the “Dead” Person comes back and picks them off one-by-one.
Pg. 39 – This is an effective scene: when Tamera, who was surely dead and buried, breezes into the classroom like nothing has happened.
Pg. 44 – 45 – This is a nasty death and a well-written one! Tamera talking about being buried alive and Roger experiencing it while he is sitting in the classroom is visually startling.
Pg. 74 – The kills are inventive and I like how they are specific to each character and what we have set up previously – like Kisha eating her own fingers and vomiting up her own literal guts because she is vain about her weight and appearance.
Pg. 87 – I like the Final Girl situation with Alison and Tamara having the teens attack her, but I can’t help but feel like if we had spent more time with Alison or if she had been our focus character throughout this would be more effective.
Pg. 92 – This is a good example of restraint – not showing us what Tamara is doing/has done to Kisha lets us imagine and that can be more horrifying.
Pg. 109 – This is a good – It’s not over! Ending. – Kisha getting the book of spells to bring Tamara back is a good ending point and last note to leave us with.
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