An excerpt from Reals’ script review for Black Widow (Unproduced David Hayter) which will be available 8/25/14:

New Section – How I Would Have Structured It!

Here is a new section of my review – How I Would Have Structured This Script. Remember, this is only my take, but I think it brings up some very good points and issues to talk about with storytelling and structure.

Here is how I would have started this screenplay:

We get Adult Widow in a massive action sequence in the streets of New York – taking out six or seven other assassins.

Then, she contacts someone the audience knows (let’s say Hawkeye, because he’s pretty useless otherwise. If it is up to me, I would pick Frank Castle – The Punisher – because he’s awesome and a story can always use more Punisher) and finds out that she has had a hit put out on her and every assassin in the city is gunning for her.

FLASHBACK – Doesn’t even have to be the red room – in fact, I would prefer that it was an Adult Widow, just starting out on an early mission.

PRESENT DAY – Widow chase scene – car crashes and all – as she narrowly evades hit-men.

FLASHBACK – More about what happened in the earlier mission – maybe this is where we get Hawkeye (or Cap or a B or C list character) who did work with her in the past via MCU continuity.

ALSO – Small hints and misdirections at who the real bad guy is. Maybe we even have Sofia (another Widow) involved.

PRESENT DAY – She goes to visit the well-known character she knew in the past. Finds out that the hit was placed by a large company, not just one person.

Well-known character is killed by —


Who Widow escapes from barely.

FLASHBACK – We see something about her past that gives us the final clue.

PRESENT DAY – She gets weapons from Frank Castle and goes to final showdown.

Final showdown with Bullseye and reveal that A.I.M. was behind the hit (A.I.M. is part of the already-established Hydra). She takes the organization down, but someone/something gets away or is still left to kill.

Set up for sequel.

My point here is (though this is probably just fan-fiction) that the plot moves forward faster and more fluidly if we don’t have to slog through the huge chunk of Little Widow-In-Training during our introduction.

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